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| Author: | Aurara [ Sat Sep 29, 2007 11:54 pm ] |
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This is a story i thought up after listining to a song. tell me what you think of it please =) Once, there was a kid named Eric who lived in a small village. This village had a nightly show with a puppeteer and his puppet. Eric never missed a show becuase he loved that puppet so much. He wanted the puppet for his own and nobody elses. So he asked the puppetmaster "Sir can i please buy that puppet, name your price, anything you desire" the man said no. and Eric went home. At home Eric thought to himself "how am I gonna get that puppet? I'll do anything. even if it means killing that man for it, I MUST have it." Eric wished of a way he could get his hands on the puppet. He fell to sleep, but was woken up by a loud noise. Eric looked around, but couldnt see anything. He couldnt move his arms or legs at all. He was stuck where he was. The puppetmaster was walking twords him with a grin on his face. He picked somthing up that looked like the control for the puppet. Eric felt himselof lifted by the strings. The puppetmaster looked at him and said "see eric, be careful what you wish for. Dreams can come alive...but not in the way you want sometimes." Eric had become what he wanted, and there was nothing he could do about it. ~Fin ^^ |
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| Author: | Whisp [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 12:20 am ] |
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ha cool master of puppets i'm pulling your strings, twisting your mind and smashing your dreams blinded by me you can't see a thing, just call my name and i'll hear your scream master MASTER |
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| Author: | Navyr [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 2:08 am ] |
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Nice metallica lol |
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| Author: | Yurichan [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 3:01 am ] |
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very good short story, nice twist too.. one thing that was throwing me off was your punctuation though. |
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| Author: | Masterg [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 3:53 am ] |
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what whisp?, i think you shouted my name so loud you woke the dead, or atleast the undead >.> |
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| Author: | Aurara [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 7:42 am ] |
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Yurichan wrote: very good short story, nice twist too.. one thing that was throwing me off was your punctuation though.
ty @.@ i still need to toutch it up alot lol. |
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| Author: | Ponuh [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 3:03 pm ] |
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This is a joke right |
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| Author: | Yurichan [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 11:16 pm ] |
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Ponuh wrote: This is a joke right
does it make you feel good to put other people's creativity down? |
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| Author: | Yurichan [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 11:16 pm ] |
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oh, and if it does.. go get some friends irl. |
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| Author: | Viviti [ Mon Oct 01, 2007 2:16 am ] |
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Ponuh wrote: This is a joke right
I have a short story: Once, there was a forum user named Ponuh. Then he got the AIDS and died. I'm still working on the ending, it should either be a sad ending and stop there and fade to black, or it could be a twist ending, where he thinks he dies from the AIDS, but then right as he dies, he wakes up, and he's sitting at his computer, looking at the YTP forums, and turns his computer off and goes outside. Text PONUH1 to 188457 for ending 1 Text PONUH2 to 188457 for ending 2 *don't actually send a text, lol |
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| Author: | Yurichan [ Mon Oct 01, 2007 10:20 am ] |
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Viviti wrote: Ponuh wrote: This is a joke right I have a short story: Once, there was a forum user named Ponuh. Then he got the AIDS and died. I'm still working on the ending, it should either be a sad ending and stop there and fade to black, or it could be a twist ending, where he thinks he dies from the AIDS, but then right as he dies, he wakes up, and he's sitting at his computer, looking at the YTP forums, and turns his computer off and goes outside. Text PONUH1 to 188457 for ending 1 Text PONUH2 to 188457 for ending 2 *don't actually send a text, lol hahahahahaha! |
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| Author: | Ponuh [ Mon Oct 01, 2007 2:13 pm ] |
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Yurichan wrote: Ponuh wrote: This is a joke right does it make you feel good to put other people's creativity down? No I was absolutely serious. |
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| Author: | Dmitry [ Mon Oct 01, 2007 2:13 pm ] |
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Yurichan wrote: Ponuh wrote: This is a joke right does it make you feel good to put other people's creativity down? Just because they're retarded, it doesn't mean taking someone else's ideas are being creative. |
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| Author: | Kluya [ Mon Oct 01, 2007 2:16 pm ] |
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I'm not feeling this either. |
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